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The poem is all too plain, but I
Am intricately constructed,
Octopus armed and lazy fingered,
Some great mass growing greater,
More spineless with each
Inking. You ask, what is it called?
And what is the point of it anyway?

The oceanographer researches, responds,
States the purpose is immeasurable.
I offer:
One.  Distraction,
Two. Smoke screen, and
Three. Mass confusion.
But darling, I am nautilus, and
My tentacles are
Imaginary.

God gave me eight limbs: two arms, two legs,
The rest, male, you can imagine,
Two labia (why all this counting?), and a clitoris,
An umbilical cord suspended, and in its place,
I grew a pen.

It’s got no fancy name; it’s called an ink sac,
A weapon that I have no sense to
Claim nor comprehend. And to the numbers?
To the years since, to the fingers,
Diligent fingers that have entered, exited,
And dispersed.
©2007-2009 ~tofog
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Given 2007-08-12

Ink Stain by ~tofog is a bold and visceral poem, the content of which possesses clarity and honesty. (Suggested by `WineWriter and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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:iconwinewriter:
Wow, this is amazing. You manage to write a narrative without simply telling what the character is feeling. You engage the reader's imagination, not just their reasoning. It's also great that you use a octopus to represent something other than itself. I'm very impressed and glad to see some really well written lit.

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I recently heard about a mass murderer who killed seventeen people in three days... they say he was a loner. Well, of course he was. He apparently killed everyone he came in contact with!
- George Carlin
:iconkittehkisses:
Just incredible, beautiful exectution. Seems almost... Metaphysical in nature, with the extended metaphor. Great work.

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and we hold these truths to be self evident:
#1 george w. bush is not president
#2 america is not a true democracy
#3 the media is not fooling me
:iconapollo4:
Wow, thats amazing! Your poem is so beautiful...

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The problem with here is that it's where I'm from.
:iconkitastropher:
instant fave :)
nice work

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K.
walk through a corner and around an archway. and you might find yourself in a place you've always been looking for.
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Ever heard of Quantum love? one can never prove it, but you know its there
:iconkildgeek:
Visual and yet abstract, for it makes me see things and wonder about others. It's explicit, and that's what creates the many different emotions for the reader. :)
:iconaltoidaddict1517:
This is too good for words. I'm actually speechless at the moment.

:+fav:!

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:Groups:
*Writers-Club *RawEm0tion
~LineCount *100ThemesChallenge
*Ex-po-zure *youthphotographers
~Self-InjuryClub *WordCount
:iconmyambergirl:
Wow, that's amazing. I love your style of writing. ^^

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:earth: :liquisoft: :damphyr:

"Oh, goody; a metal bar!"
:iconphotocrafter:
Wonderfully written!
:icontinyplaidninja:
Wow that's really cool! I love the way you wrote it. :+fav:!

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I haven't lost my mind; I know exactly where I left it.
:ninja:

"13 pi over 6 does not equal pi over 6. It's just kind of one of those 'duh' things."
-Dr. Harnett during Math Analysis

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